Hi,
I finally got around to reading the draft. Apart from using unfavorable terms, I am really excited about this draft in general. Finally, there is a commitment that applies to contractors as well, not just to government works themselves.
However, the draft often says "as much as possible" and "as soon as possible". I am a bit afraid that this gives government offices too much leeway and some will weasel out of their obligations. There are some minimum requirements in the right direction, but I think they need to go further. Why not say "as much as possible" for everything that is already developed, but making all software developed in the future 100% Free Software? Government contracts are highly attractive, so publishing those works as Free Software shouldn't be an issue whatsoever.
Also, a list of acceptable licenses might be a good idea. Maybe they can just refer to the FSF on that [1][2][3]. It would just be nice if the government didn't use some obscure license or even use their own vanity license. They could also just include a short list with AGPL, GPL, LGPL, and Apache 2.0. I can't think of any other licenses anyone would need for software.
Happy hacking! Florian
[1] http://www.gnu.org/licenses/ [2] http://www.gnu.org/licenses/license-recommendations.html [3] http://www.gnu.org/licenses/license-list.html#SoftwareLicenses